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Survivalcraft Comics
by Yassawe for Survivalcraft Public

If you want to upload this comic on your website, blog, etc, you MUST post link: vk.com/survivalcraftpublic

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Last Edited By: sighmoon 9 July, 2014 05:00:01. Edited 4 times

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4 July, 2014 15:47:02

Are you russian? they often confuse "There is" and "Is there" in questions. Allthough I try to avoid arguments like "Minecraft versus Survivalcraft" my final decision will depend of continue of this comics

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gabe1120

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4 July, 2014 16:59:49

I just have one question towards this comic. Why does it look like the MineCraft character model? Other than that it looks interesting. It's something I would mind posting up on Twitter and stuff (and of course giving credit to the person who made it for when posting.) Could the character look more like the character model now?

I really like the comic and would read it most definitely. It's just the characters model. :)

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4 July, 2014 17:03:09

@lm0199o 

Please don't cuss. This is your warning. Try and find better ways on saying you don't like the way it is without using "foul language please. Thanks.

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4 July, 2014 17:58:08

@gabe1120 
Ok. By the way, there is minecraft character model because this comics about Steve's adventures in SurvivalCraft. And I think "another guy" is SC protagonist. Anyway let's wait continue :)

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6 July, 2014 16:07:33

Lm0199O,
Yes, i'm russian.Sometimes i translate my words using Google translator. Maybe I can make fewer mistakes if I check the text :)

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6 July, 2014 16:11:45

Last Edited By: sighmoon 9 July, 2014 05:07:53. Edited 1 time.

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6 July, 2014 17:52:52

Well, I guess humor is subjective... But what I'd really work on is the language. A comic strip cannot work with faulty language. Every single sentence contains a plethora of syntax, grammar and/or spelling errors. I'd really concentrate on getting the language right, or work with someone who has a better command of the English language. English isn't my native language either, but the abundance of errors in every single sentence really distracted and irritated me to the point where I wasn't able to concentrate on the actual comic strip...

Just a heads-up, no offense intended.


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6 July, 2014 21:51:45

As I was the one complaining about the language, here are some corrected phrases. You'll have to check whether or not the meaning has been kept intact... or change it accordingly.

Oh my god, is he a leper?

Have you ever seen something like this?

Yes, but that was a long time ago and that guy was dressed differently

Throw him overboard

By the way, what did I say to that other guy?

"Help won't come"?

I am god knows where, forced to survive and fighting monsters

And as soon as I conquer my world, build my own royal palace, and start enjoying my life…

My world and my home will be deleted and I'll have to begin all over again

But I had never seen that ship before…

And here are quite unusual textures

I had passed through it a hundred times

Like a squirrel (what's "in while" supposed to mean?)

Of course, first you need to get wood

It's interesting what you'd do if you were in the forest

And you'd have to chop wood with your bare hands like crazy

At first, that seemed strange to me

But then I got used to it

You know, I thought I'd die like a hero

I heard people saw their ancestors before they died

I think my ancestors will laugh long and hard, if they find out how I died

So, have I died?


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7 July, 2014 01:45:32

I like the other part to it. It's interesting but, like others have said (up there ^), it does need some grammar changes. I couldn't understand that phrase "like a squirrel in (something). I really dunno what's supposed to be there. :(

I could help with spelling as well. :)

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7 July, 2014 05:58:28

Uhm... I just translated all wrong portions if you actually read one post above you...


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7 July, 2014 08:41:04

We need someone who will help to correct grammatical errors in the text, which I will send.

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